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Can't do better than Randy's correction. So I am editing and giving it a good polish.
"Just A Story"
Chapter 1
It was a nice morning. The sun was shining and white clouds were running fleeingaway to from it the east. I woke up early that very sunny Sunday. day. (It was Sunday and that day was really sunny). After taking a shower and having a delicious breakfast I decided to go walk into the garden. It which is sweeter seemed more pleasant to me than my comfortable comfy room. The warm wind was blowing; there bringing a pleasant smell wonderful fragrance of flowers welcoming me; beautiful birds were flying in a the blue sky; singing their best songs and the air... was so fresh... All this these made me feel happy.
There was nobody at No one was home. Dad had gone to meet his old friends. Mum was with my sister Jane and they were shopping for food in a the supermarket to buy some food. My elder older brother John got was married last summer and so that he doesn't live with us now.
To be continued..
Nice introduction to a story. Makes the reader want to know more.
"Just Story"
Chapter 1
It was a nice morning. The sun was shining, and white clouds were running away to the east. I woke up early that day. (It was Sunday, and that day was really sunny). After taking a shower and having a delicious breakfast, I decided to go to the garden, which is seemed sweeter to me than my comfortable room. A warm wind was blowing there in the garden, bringing a the pleasent pleasant smell of flowers. Beautiful birds were flying in a blue sky, singing their best songs, and the air was so fresh...All this made me feel happy..
There was nobody at home. Dad had gone to meet his old friends. Mum, with my sister Jane, were went in to a the supermarket to buy some food. My elder brother John got married last summer, so that he doesn't no longer lived with us now.
to be continued..
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