A Weary Day.

I run my own business, which is still small... but it seems to be going down and down recently.... I am feeling like dying. I don't even know how deeper it will go_afterward.
I'm feeling so lonely. ...You're doing a good job. Keep writing! *About your problem, well, world economy is not very stable these days, but I guess everything should go back to normal in a few weeks. Let's hope for the best!

Weary Day

I have my own business that is still small...

However instead of growing, recently it's been going down and down...
I feel like ending my life.
I don't even don't know how much further it will go down.
I am so lonely

I put "However instead of growing" as opposed to "but" because after stating that your business is "still small" (negative conotation) you have to contrast the next sentece. This is because with the negative conotation from the previous sentence the reader is already expecting your business to not be doing well. Does that make sense?

I changed "deeper" to "further" because the sentence was too repetive with "deeper" and "down". The word "afterwards" isn't needed after this change. :)

Finally I removed the "and" in the last sentence. Since it's the beginning of the new sentence you don't need a conjunction

Hope this helps!

You're doing great! ^^

weary day

i (I) have my own business, that is (still) small... but (recently it is) it's going down and down recently....
I am feeling like (my life is ending) end my life.
I (don't even know how) even don't know how deeper it will go down afterward.
and (I am feeling) S so lonely

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