Before correcting your entry, make sure you correct the following mechanics of your essay first to show your sincerity and seriousness in learning English.

1.  我 = I.  No exception.

2.  Never use slang in formal essays.  I treat all note entries as formal essays but not what we write in comment boxes.  So change all your "n" into "and" and spell out all abbreviations such as "it's" into "it is"

3.  For punctuation marks such as comma and periods, no spaces before but ONE and TWO after them respectively.

4.  All simple numerals should be spelt out in full.

Small Town n Big City

I am born in a small town with a big family.i have eight family number: parents, younger sister, younger brother, grandparents, grandpa`s older sister(she never marry) n me . life is comfortable. but in my opinion is like everyday is just like a same day. it`s a quite small town n no big deals things happen often. there has one thing people who enjoy to talking some gossip together.
i am gonna to talking about my childhood it`s boring n i love to be alone just with myself. i have bother n sister, i suppose to be a lot of fun with then but not always, when i was around 5 years old,that is the first time i know i have a younger sister. so that is the first time i met my sister in my aunt`s house. There was another town near of mine. She is my blood sister. guest why? That is the famous China Birth Control conflict with the another traditional concept of the people who needs a boy to procreation. without a boy, woman`s life will become harder. my family wants a boy, so they need to hide my sister. so now i got a bother too.
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Small Town n Big City

I was born in a small town with a big family. We were a family of eight: parents, younger sister, younger brother, grandparents, grandpa`s older sister (she never married) and me. Life was comfortable. but in my opinion is like However, everyday was just like the day before. It's was a quiet and small town where nothing ever happened. It had only one thing; people who enjoyed gossiping together. 
I am going to talk about My childhood was boring and I loved to be alone with just myself. I had a brother and sister, i suppose to be who were a lot of fun to be around, but not always. When I was around five years old I found out for the first time that I had a younger sister. The first time I met my sister was at my aunt`s house. There was another town near of mine. She is my blood sister. Guess why? That is the famous China Birth Control's conflict with a traditional concept of the people who needing a boy for procreation. Without a boy, a woman`s life will become harder. My family wanted a boy, so they needed to hide my sister. Now I have a brother too.

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Small Town & Big City

I am born in a small town with a big family.i have 8 family number; parents , younger sister , younger brother , grandparents , grandpa`s older sister (she never got marry) and me . life is comfortable, but in my opinion is like everyday is just like a same day. it`s a quite small town and no big deals things happen often. there has one thing people who enjoy to talk is some gossip together.
i am going to talking about my childhood. It`s boring and i love to be alone just with myself. i have a bother and a sister, i suppose to have a lot of fun with then but it is not, when i was around 5 years old,that is the first time i know i have a younger sister. so that is the first time i met my sister in my aunt`s house. There was another town where is near of mine. She is my blood sister. guess why? That is the famous China Birth Control conflict with the another traditional concept of the people who needs a boy to procreation. without a boy woman`s life will become harder. my family wants a boy, so they need to hide my sister. So now i got a bother too.
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Small Town n Big City

I was born in a small town with a big family.We are 8. My mother and father, my younger sister, my younger brother,ny grandfather and grandmother, my grandfather's older sister(she never got married),and me. Life is good. But in my opinion everyday is the same the other days. It`s a quite small town and no big deals things happen often. There is one thing for  people who enjoy to talking is some gossip.
I am gonna mention about my childhood. It was boring and i liked to be alone just with myself. I have brother and sister, I usually have lots of fun with them but always. I was around 5 years old,when i was told that i have a younger sister first time.However i've met my sister in my aunt`s house first time. She is my blood sister. Guess why? The famous China Birth Control conflict with the another traditional concept of the people who need a boy to procreation. without a boy, woman`s life will become harder. my family wants a boy.For this reason, they needed to hide my sister. Now i've also got a brother. 
I'll continue tomorrow...