Beijing

Beijing is the capital of China. I have lived and studied in Beijing for over three years.

I travelled to Beijing for the first time when I was 6.

[When I was six years old, I travelled to Beijing for the first time.]

I can still remember a question my mother asked me during the trip. She asked, "Which city do you like better? Beijing or Nanchang?" (Nanchang is a the city where I was born and where I used to live). "Beijing!" I said without hesitation.

Eleven years later, I came here went there again [filled] with hope,ambition and determination [and today I am still living in Beijing]. Life here was busy but colourful exciting enough that I enjoyed it. I even encountered met the most important person in my life.

Encounter also means to meet.  However, it has a special meaning.  It means to meet something unexpected, usually shocking or bad.

I encountered many difficulties in trying to cross the cold mountain with a broken leg.

Meet is more neutral and is more commonly used in the context of people.

I met many sailors making funny jokes at the docks (where the boats are).

Places such as Wudaokou,Madian Park,and Dongjiaominxiang reminded me of an abundance of unforgettable memories.

When I visited Wudaokou,Madian Park,and Dongjiaominxiang, all places I had gone to in the past, I remembered so many good times.

Wherever I go in the future,I will always regard Beijing as my second hometown forever!

#你的英文很棒！一天我希望我的中文能力能像你的英文那么好。

Beijing

Beijing is the capital of China. I have lived and studied in Beijing there for over three years.

I travelled to Beijing for the first time when I was six 6. I still remember a question my mother asked me during the trip. She asked "Which city do you like better? Beijing or Nanchang?" (Nanchang is a city where I was born and used to live). "Beijing!" I said without hesitation.

Eleven years later, I came here again with hope, ambition and determination. Life here was busy but colourful.   that I enjoyed the place very much it. I even encountered the most important person in my life. Places such as Wudaokou, Madian Park, Dongjiaominxiang reminded me of an abundance of unforgettable memories. Wherever I go in the future, I will regard Beijing as my second hometown forever!

Your English is very commendable.  Next time, I shall not correct your essays but edit them in a higher level.  So when you see my "corrections", it is not more because of your grammar but the finer points and the better way of expressing your thoughts on paper.  Good job!

You need to pay attention to your punctuation spacing rules.  If you don't know them, here's my article on them.  Like I tell other people, the mechanics of the language is extremely important.  It would be like your photo, beautiful but on coming closer only to find foul breath.

Next time, don't write to my blackboard.  Just send me the link to your essay in a private message.  This way, I won't overlook your essays.  At the same time, it will be easy for me to jump to your essay from the email via the link.

http://www.italki.com/knowledge/page/Mechanics%20Of%20The%20English%20Language.htm

Beijing

Beijing is the capital of China. I have lived and studied in Beijing for over three years.

I travelled to Beijing for the first time when I was 6. I still remember a question my mother asked me during the trip. She asked "Which city do you like better? Beijing or Nanchang?" (Nanchang is a city where I was born and used to live). "Beijing!" I said without hesitation.

Eleven years later,I came here again with hope,ambition and determination. Life here was busy but colourful, and I enjoyed it. I even encountered the most important person in my life. Places such as Wudaokou,Madian Park,Dongjiaominxiang remind me of an abundance of unforgettable memories. Wherever I go in the future,I will regard Beijing as my second hometown forever!

Great Job!- 你的英文詞彙量超好！