Girl's Age
May 2th is Cherry's birthday,Cherry is my shopping buddy.I wrote a passage about her several days ago.She says to me that she feels very upset about her age in spite of the fact that she is only 20.Since she is a member of twenty something girls ,she makes a great decision that she will not celebrate her birthday anymore.In another way ,it means I will have no chance to eat her birthday cake .
Perhaps it was in the memories of her birthday parties,which would not happen again.Her decision does not constitue a precedent.Many girls do this kind of things ,which is a matter of escaping the reality.They are afraid of what age will bring them ,such as wrinkles，obesity，and boring life.
In my opinion,age leaves girls the choice of being positive and being negative about life.Yes,it 's truth that elder women have more wrinkles than younger girls ,while age is also the instrument of experience and wisdom .This is the similar case with men.Life experience is much more important than wrinkles.
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Girl's Age
May 2nd is Cherry's birthday. Cherry is my shopping buddy. I wrote a passage about her several days ago. She tells me that she feels very upset about her age, in spite of the fact that she's only 20. Since she's a member of the 'twenty-something girls', she made a big decision: she's not going to celebrate her birthday anymore. In other words ,it means I won't have the chance to eat her birthday cake anymore .Perhaps it was (what was?) in the memories of her birthday parties, which won't happen again. Her decision does not constitute any sort of precedent. Many girls do this kind of thing, and it's a matter of escaping
In my opinion, aging leaves girls with the choice of being positive or being negative about life.Yes, it 's true that elderly women have more wrinkles than younger girls, however, age is also the instrument of experience and wisdom .The case is similar with men. Life experience is much more important than wrinkles.
That's all!
Good job! Your format is natural and the writing flows well. My corrections are merely things to make it perfect. :)
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Girl's Age
May 2th is Cherry's birthday,Cherry is my shopping buddy.I wrote a passage about her several days ago.She says to me that she feels very upset about her age , in spite of the fact that she is only 20.Since she is a member of twenty something girls ,she makes a great decision that she will not celebrate her birthday anymore.In another way ,it means I will have no chance to eat her birthday cake .Perhaps it was in the memories of her birthday parties, which would not happen again.Her decision does not constitue a precedent.Many girls do this kind of things ,which is a matter of escaping the reality.They are afraid of what age will bring them ,such as wrinkles，obesity，and boring life.
In my opinion,age leaves girls the choice of being positive and being negative about life.Yes,it 's truth that elder women have more wrinkles than younger girls ,while age is also the instrument of experience and wisdom .This is the similar case with men.Life experience is much more important than wrinkles.
That's all!
都是搭配的问题，有很多中文思维
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