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Chocolate When I was younger chocolate was one of my favorite foods. But when I grow up I was starting to abstain this food from my daily menu. And nowadays I don't eat it at all. On the one hand chocolate is sweetly tasty food that gives me a lot of energy from just small piece. I used to take with me a piece of chocolate for each test I had because that energy I get from the chocolate make me get better grades in tests. On the other hand after I finish my test I got a sugar drop in my blood what makes me sleepy and distracted than I was before. When I got to adolescence I got zits on my face. When I come to the doctor, he said I should avoid chocolate if I don't want any more zits. That was the time I start abstain chocolate. Avoiding chocolate isn't my favorite decision because chocolate was one of my favorite food I gave up of, But I have to fulfill what the doctor said.

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Chocolate

When I was younger, chocolate was one of my favorite food treats. But 1when I grow up I was starting started to abstain it when I grew up.  this food from my daily menu. And 1 Nowadays I don't eat it at all.

On the one hand Chocolate is sweetly tasty food is a sweet treat that gives me a lot much of energy from just one small piece. I used to take with me bring a piece of chocolate with me for each before taking tests I had because so that I have the that extra energy I get from the chocolate make me to get better grades in tests.
On the other hand However after I finish after I am done with my tests I got a my sugar levels drop in my blood what makes me and I became sleepy and gets distracted easily than I was before. When I got to entered my adolescence,  I got zits 2 acnes popped up on my face. When I come to The doctor, he said told me to lay off I should avoid chocolate if I don't want any to avoid more zits. That was the time when I started abstaining from chocolate.
Avoiding chocolate isn't my favorite decision Not of my own accord because as chocolate was one of my favorite food I gave up of, But treats but I have to fulfill listen what the doctor said.

1.   Don't begin a sentence with a conjuction that is use to connect two sentences in the middle.

2.  Zit is slang while acne is the proper term

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I'll never give up loving chocolate.

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