Corrections · 2
Chocolate
When I was younger, chocolate was one of my favorite food treats. But 1when I grow up I was starting started to abstain it when I grew up. this food from my daily menu. And 1 Nowadays I don't eat it at all.
On the one hand Chocolate is sweetly tasty food is a sweet treat that gives me a lot much of energy from just one small piece. I used to take with me bring a piece of chocolate with me for each before taking tests I had because so that I have the that extra energy I get from the chocolate make me to get better grades in tests.
On the other hand However after I finish after I am done with my tests I got a my sugar levels drop in my blood what makes me and I became sleepy and gets distracted easily than I was before. When I got to entered my adolescence, I got zits 2 acnes popped up on my face. When I come to The doctor, he said told me to lay off I should avoid chocolate if I don't want any to avoid more zits. That was the time when I started abstaining from chocolate.
Avoiding chocolate isn't my favorite decision Not of my own accord because as chocolate was one of my favorite food I gave up of, But treats but I have to fulfill listen what the doctor said.
1. Don't begin a sentence with a conjuction that is use to connect two sentences in the middle.
2. Zit is slang while acne is the proper term
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