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Behaviour change It is not a secret that the city is a concrete jungle with the third part of the national population living here. This place is full of contrast. On the one hand we have beautiful green suburbs and on the other, new communities where almost every thing is needed. However, I do not want to write about the city but a particular behaviour change from some people that has been noticed through the last few years. Some years ago, there where institutions and people who cared about mayor adults and vulnerable women and children in many parts of the city, not only the new communities. They were individuals who donated their time and money to help who needed help. But now, the number of benefactors has dropped while more and more people are looking after abandoned animals in parks and streets of this town, even without adopting them. Those people prefer to give their money, efforts and time to feed and shelter animals. I can say it is an honourable action, I am sure about that. But how about people in need, especially in this very difficult moment of pandemic? Where have we left our humanity?

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It is not a secret that the city is a concrete jungle with (a third) of the national population living here. This place is full of (contrasts). On the one hand(,) we have beautiful green suburbs and on the other, new communities where almost (everything) is needed. However, I do not want to write about the city but (rather about) a particular (behavior) change from some people that has been noticed (over) the last few years. Some years ago, there where institutions and people who cared about (older) adults and vulnerable women and children in many parts of the city, (and) not only (in) the new communities. They were individuals who donated their time and money to help (those) who needed help. (Now), the number of benefactors has dropped while more and more people are looking after abandoned animals in parks and streets of this town, even without adopting them. (These) people prefer to give their money, efforts(,) and time to feed and shelter animals. I can say it is an (honorable) action(.) I am sure about that. (What) about people in need(?)(Especially) in this very difficult moment of (the pandemic)? Where have we left our humanity? Hi Simone! You're doing great! Do not begin a sentence in English with the word "but." A couple of the spelling changes I made were due to the fact that I changed your spelling from British English to American English. British English isn't wrong, however, it is not common in the Americas.

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