An actually bad decision !!
I found a cup of yogurt that was beyond the shelf life for one day in fridge at 11 pm yesterday . I thought it’s a bad action to waste food and decided to have the yogurt. It’s so cold 🥶 when I have it first！My brain flow some sounds:”can’t waste food!” until I eaten up it. Then, when I went to bed my stomach began ache that was miserable thing that seriously affected my sleep quality. The end result is that I didn’t sleep all night 😭
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An actually bad decision !!
I found a cup of yogurt that was beyond the shelf life for one day in fridge at 11 pm yesterday . I thought it’s a bad action to waste food and decided to have the yogurt. It’s so cold 🥶 when I have it first！My brain flow some sounds:”can’t waste food!” until I eaten up it. Then, when I went to bed my stomach began ache that was miserable thing that seriously affected my sleep quality. The end result is that I didn’t sleep all night 😭
A very bad decision!!
At 11 p.m yesterday I found a cup of yogurt that was one day past its shelf life. I thought, "It's bad to waste food," and decided to eat the yogurt. It was so cold when I first tasted it! I thought, "I can't waste food!" so I ate it all. When I went to bed, my stomach began aching. It was a miserable thing that seriously affected my sleep quality. The end result was that I didn't sleep all night.
"Actually bad" is incorrect English. "Actually" is an adverb, not an adjective. (Example: It was actually a bad decision) You could also change the title to "An extremely bad decision!!"
I rearranged the first sentence to make it more clear.
In the last sentence I changed "is to "was" because you need the past tense. The night is over, so you say "was."
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An actually bad decision !!
I found a cup of yogurt that was ONE DAY beyond ITS shelf life for one day in fridge at 11 pm yesterday . I thought "it’s a bad action to waste food and decided to have the yogurt. IT WAS so cold 🥶 when I FIRST TASTED IT！BUT I THOUGHT:”can’t waste food!”AND I ATE IT UP. Then, when I went to bed, my stomach began TO ache- that MADE ME miserable AND seriously affected my sleep quality. The end result is that I didn’t sleep all night 😭
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你改了之后，句子一下子变闪亮✨了。非常感谢😀
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