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Are patchwork families the new standard? Hi Community, I would thankfully appreciate if you could correct my English essay. The conclusion insists out of one sentence, I don't exactly know where to put a point without messing up the meaning. Are patchwork families the new standard? Children from patchwork families are disadvantaged for their later life. That's common sense, but there are almost forgotten positive aspects too. About 20 per cent of all families are patchwork families which benefits coin these kids? Nowadays the point of view on families is different. It's not about the blood anymore, there are facets like acceptance for who you are and the attempt to make you smile and feel loved. Furthermore, they claim benefits at their working life for themselves because of their ability to deal better with new situations in life. Due to the fact grown-ups which once lived in a patchwork family socialize with many people at work and create an atmosphere of tolerance and collectiveness. Even the royal family of Norway is a patchwork family, with their oldest son who is from a preceding relationship by Princess Mette-Marit. On this occasion, I would like to draw my conclusion that whether you grow up in a patchwork family or not, you can claim your own benefits as long as there is love and support in your own particular type of family.

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Are patchwork families the new standard?

Hi Community, I would thankfully appreciate if you could correct my English essay. The conclusion insists out of one sentence, I don't exactly know where to put a point without messing up the meaning.

Are patchwork families the new standard?

Children from patchwork families are disadvantaged for in their later life. That's common sense but there are almost forgotten positive aspects too.* About 20% per cent of all families are patchwork families which benefits coin these kids?**
Nowadays, the point of view on families is different. It's not about the blood anymore,* there are facets like acceptance for who you are and the attempt to make you smile and feel loved.

Furthermore, they claim there are benefits at in their working life environment for themselves because of their ability to deal better with new situations in life.* Due to the fact that grown-ups, which once lived in a patchwork family, socialize with many people at work and create an atmosphere of tolerance and collectiveness.*

Even the royal family of Norway is a patchwork family - with their oldest son who is from a preceding relationship by Princess Mette-Marit.

On this occasion, I would like to draw my conclusion that whether you grow up in a Patchwork family or not, you can claim your own benefits as long as there is love and support in your own particular type of family.


**I wasn't sure what the end of this sentence meant so I wasn't able to give any real insight
*alternative phrasing: "...but there are positive aspects that are often forgotten."
*alternative phrasing: "It's no longer only about blood relation but instead..."
*alternative phrasing: "...because they are able to handle life situations better."
*alternative phrasing: "This may be due to those that previously lived in patchwork families now socialize..."

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