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"Moon River" A few weeks ago I decided to read books in english. The first I chose, actually, was a novel, written by Truman Capote, Breakfast at Tiffany's in a bilingual version. I had a lot of pleasure reading this book. The characters are very interessant. I find the story is, in a way funny, and also deep and mysterious. The style is so modern for something which had been written in the 60'. This story had been adapted to a film performed by Audrey Hepburn who plays the main character. I like so much the famous song of this film "Moon River", a simple melody, a sweet voice hold up by a few guitar chords. This song is so beautiful, smoothy, and poetical... "Moon River, and me"... You should listen to it !

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Great job! FYI, the American band "Deep Blue Something" had a pop song called Breakfast at Tiffany's in the '90s, so if you're into the book and the movie, maybe you should check out the song for fun too. :)

"Moon River"

A few weeks ago, I decided to read books in English. The first I chose, actually, was a novel written by Truman Capote called "Breakfast at Tiffany's" in a bilingual version.
I had a lot of pleasure really enjoyed reading this book. The characters are very interessant interesting. I find the story is, in a way, funny but [1] also deep and mysterious.
The style is so modern for something which had been [2] written in the '60s.
This story had been [2] was adapted to a film performed by [3] starring Audrey Hepburn, who plays the main character.
I like [4] so much the famous song of from this film "Moon River", a simple melody, a sweet voice hold held up by a few guitar chords. This song is so beautiful, smoothy, and poetical... "Moon River, and me"... You should listen to it!

[1] I think you really want to use "but" here to emphasize that you not *only* found it funny *but* also deep and mysterious. It emphasizes the contrast.

[2] you could say "that was written" or just "written," but a native speaker wouldn't really use "which had been written" here. The same applies to "had been" in the next sentence. You could use that tense when you're also talking about something that happened *after* the event you're describing. (Ex: I had been working all day when he got there.)

[3] you can say "performed by" but only after a role. The film was starring Hepburn; the role was played by Hepburn.

[4] we say "I like (something) so much" but if you're not putting the something in the middle of the phrase, you need to say it another way... I really like... I love... or if you want to be less formal, you could say "I'm so into" or something like that.
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Hi Camille! You did a great job. Note that in some of the places where I edited the punctuation, different native speakers may have different opinions. Let me know if you have any questions!
-Allen

A few weeks ago I decided to read books in English. The first I chose, actually, was a novel, written by Truman Capote: Breakfast at Tiffany's, in a bilingual version.

I had a lot of pleasure really/thoroughly enjoyed reading this book. The characters are very interessant interesting. I find the story is in a way funny, and also deep and mysterious.

The style is so modern for something which had been written in the '60s.
("which had been" is possible here, but sounds very formal; "something written in the '60s" sounds more idiomatic.)
(Native English speakers get confused all the time about where to put the apostrophe in abbreviated decades ('60s or 60's?). I had to look it up myself to make sure I told you the correct way!)

This story had been adapted to a film performed by featuring Audrey Hepburn, who plays the main character.
I really like so much the famous song of this film "Moon River", a simple melody, a sweet voice held up by a few guitar chords. This song is so beautiful, smoothy smooth, and poetical poetic... "Moon River, and me"... You should listen to it!
(Note: no space before the "!" in English).
("poetical" isn't wrong, it's just rare and maybe a little... poetic : )

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