A formal email
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am contacting you to request some information about the three-weekend counseling course at your school.
I am studying at a language high school in Italy so I am interested in improving my English skills. I place a high value on personal integrity, moreover I am an extrovert and cheerful person. For these reasons I am sure that a course in an English language school in London will be extremely useful for me.
Could you tell me if accommodation with a family not far from the school with no Italian guests is possible? I would particularly like to know if there is good transport to the school.
I would also appreciate it if you could inform me about the kind of lessons included in the course, and if excursions and guided visits are provided.
In addition, I would be grateful if you could give me some details about the teachers.
I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully,
Chenya Lu
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A formal email
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am contacting you to request some information about the three-weekend counseling course at your school.
I am studying at a language high school in Italy so I am interested in improving my English skills. I place a high value on personal integrity, moreover I am an outgoing and cheerful person. For these reasons I am sure that a course in an English language school in London will be extremely useful for me.
Could you tell me if accommodation with a family not far from the school with no Italian guests is possible? I would particularly like to know if there is good transport to the school.
I would also appreciate it if you could inform me about the kind of lessons included in the course, and if excursions and guided visits are provided.
In addition, I would be grateful if you could give me some details about the teachers.
I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully,
Chenya Lu
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Chenya I think this is excellent and the only thing I would change is " I am an extrovert and cheerful person" to "I am an outgoing and cheerful person"...In Italian extrovert is always a positive asset however in English it can be seen as either positive or negative depending on who is reading it. "Outgoing" would be better in my bilingual opinion :D :D
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