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Argentina flagDeris E. Spina
Behind The Rise of Entrepreneurs In the last decades, the importance of entrepreneurs in the market has increased considerably, as they play a major role in the development of fintechs, as well as the increasing world of e-commerce. But, why have entrepreneurs become so important for our society? In the first place, the world has entered a new and rapidly changing digital era. Therefore, it is now possible to apply new technologies such as Artificial Intelligence, Internet-Of-Things and software development to fulfill people’s needs in innovative ways. As a result, many young people create their own companies where they apply these technologies to solve big problems in finance, science, logistic and entertainment. Moreover, more traditional markets, like clothing, have been hugely impacted by the use of social media and online shopping. Now, entrepreneurs can sell their products online without the need of a physical shop, making it easier to start a company. Another fact that is leading many young people to become entrepreneurs is the difficulty to find a job as an employee. Due to the population growth and the need for highly trained workers, the competence to get a job is getting tougher, especially for those seeking for their first job. Therefore, those who do not succeed in this struggle rapidly may find quite attractive the idea of becoming their own bosses and applying their own ideas. To sum up, the global changes in technology, economy and demographics have increased considerably the number of entrepreneurs and millions of small companies are created every year. As a result, the fintechs, start-ups and e-commerce are reshaping their markets, changing the way we buy, pay and live. For that reason, the role of entrepreneurs, with their unique skills and passion for what they do, will continue to be of extreme importance for the global economy.

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[Hi Deris--your English is excellent! My only corrections relate to an arcane rule about when to use or not use a comma after the first word or phrase in a sentence. It's something that native English speakers get wrong all the time. See below for details.]

Behind The Rise of Entrepreneurs

In the last decades, the importance of entrepreneurs in the market has increased considerably, as they play a major role in the development of fintechs, as well as the increasing world of e-commerce. But why have entrepreneurs become so important for our society? [no need for a comma after "but" here--this is an error common to native English speakers. See: https://blog.oup.com/2018/10/linguistics-comma-after-but/ ]

In the first place, the world has entered a new and rapidly changing digital era. Therefore, it is now possible to apply new technologies such as Artificial Intelligence, Internet-Of-Things and software development to fulfill people’s needs in innovative ways.
[However, you are correct in putting a comma after "therefore." The same rule mentioned in the OUP blog post linked above makes this point about "however;" the same rule applies to "therefore" but not "but."]

As a result, many young people create their own companies where they apply these technologies to solve big problems in finance, science, logistics and entertainment.
["logistics" is always plural in English]

Moreover, more traditional markets, like clothing, have been hugely impacted by the use of social media and online shopping. Now entrepreneurs can sell their products online without the need of a physical shop, making it easier to start a company.
[Also no comma after now in this context because it refers to the time of now; you only use a comma after "now" when it's not referring to the time but rather is functioning as an introductory filler word similar to "so." See the top response in this Quora post: https://www.quora.com/Is-it-neccesary-to-add-a-comma-after-the-word-now]

Another fact that is leading many young people to become entrepreneurs is the difficulty to find a job as an employee. Due to the population growth and the need for highly trained workers, the competence to get a job is getting tougher, especially for those seeking for their first job. Therefore, those who do not succeed in this struggle rapidly may find quite attractive the idea of becoming their own bosses and applying their own ideas.

To sum up, the global changes in technology, economy and demographics have increased considerably the number of entrepreneurs and millions of small companies are created every year. As a result, the fintechs, start-ups and e-commerce are reshaping their markets, changing the way we buy, pay and live. For that reason, the role of entrepreneurs, with their unique skills and passion for what they do, will continue to be of extreme importance for the global economy.

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