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Are there any mistakes? It is argued that asylum seekers must get more help from rich countries. This essay agrees that developed countries should take more refugees and should give them houses, food and medical care. Firstly, this essay will discuss that fact that only wealthy countries can provide basic assistance for those in need and, secondly, discuss the important impact of accepting asylum seekers. Rich countries should take vast majority of refugees in the world. These countries have enough money to ensure everything that forced immigrants might need – houses, food, medical care and education for their children. Also wealthy countries usually have special structures to work with refugees. For example, during the war in Syria in 2018 most part of asylum seekers tried to get to German because only in this country they might have the level of support they needed. Accepting refugees plays huge role in developing of nation. New citizens usually are young and ambitious. They start new businesses or become a cheap labor, and this leads to fast development of their city, region or even the whole country. For instance, there were many small towns in the south of the USA with decreasing population. They should have disappeared. But nowadays with asylum seekers from Mexico these towns are growing and thriving. In conclusion, the huge amount of refugees should be accepted and supported mostly by wealthy countries. They have enough resources to deal with asylum seekers properly. Taking forced immigrants is an advantage for these countries because it can lead to further development of cities and regions.

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Hi Mari,

Obviously with such a complex passage of writing we could talk about things more in depth but I hope you find some of the following suggestions helpful.

"It is argued that asylum seekers must get more help from rich countries. This essay will argue that developed countries should take in more refugees and should give provide them with houses, food and medical care. Firstly, this essay will discuss that fact that only wealthy countries can provide such basic assistance for those in need and, secondly, discuss the important impact of accepting asylum seekers.

(on a related point, be careful about using "asylum seekers" and "refugees" interchangeably as above you mention both but can be different)

Rich countries should take the vast majority of refugees in the world. These countries have enough money to ensure everything that forced immigrants might need – houses, food, medical care, and education for their children. Also Additionally, wealthy countries usually have special structures to work with refugees. For example, during the war in Syria in 2018 most part of asylum seekers tried to get to Germany because only in this country they might would they have the level of support they needed.

Accepting refugees plays huge role in developing the development of a nation. Such new citizens usually are young and ambitious. They start new businesses or become a cheap labor, and this leads to the fast development of their city, region or even the whole country. For instance, there were many small towns in the south of the USA with a decreasing population They that should have disappeared but nowadays instead, with the support of asylum seekers from Mexico, these towns are now growing and thriving.

In conclusion, the huge amount of refugees should be accepted and supported mostly by wealthy countries. Not only do they have They have enough resources to deal with asylum seekers properly but taking forced immigrants is an advantage for these countries because it can lead to the further development of cities and regions."

I hope you find some of that useful!

Many thanks,

Sean :)

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