Let Me Escape from My Endless Nightmares
People see me as a cheerful, enthusiastic and lively person without any worries or problems. Actually, it's very different inside. I feel depressed, isolated and broken inside. I don't have a peaceful family life as they think. What I have is a problem father, a heavy drinker, who always ignites a problem by words that hurt us. Everytime he gets drunk, he complaints my mother about the curries and tries to start an argument. He curses her and turns a small argument into a big fight. He fights my mom with words which make my mom sad and cry. This repeats every day. I cannot stand him any longer and so I ask my mom to leave him alone and to divorce him officially. She can't do that. We have been sinking in these sufferings for long. I had thought about leaving from my home, yet I could not do due to my mom. I hope our sufferings might be washed away very soon. If I met the Aladdin, I would ask him to grant me a genuine happy family in which everyone loves and respects each other.
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My Endless Nightmares
Externally, people see me as a cheerful, enthusiastic, and lively person without any worries or problems. Actually, nothing could be further from the truth; it is very different internally. I often feel depressed, isolated, and emotionally broken-up inside. I definitely do not have as peaceful a family life as they think. What I have is a problem father, a heavy drinker, who always creates problems by using words that hurt us. Every time he gets drunk, he angrily complains to my mother about the curries and tries to start an argument. He then unjustly curses her, and frequently turns a small inconvenience or annoyance into a big fight. He calls my mom names, terrible words that make my mom sad and cry. This seemingly repeats every single day. I cannot stand him any longer, and so I asked my mom to leave him, or officially divorce him, but she cannot do that. We have been stuck, suffering in this nightmare for so long. I myself had thought about leaving from my home, yet, I could not abandon my mom. I hope our suffering might end one day very soon. If only it were somehow possible to meet Aladdin, I would ask him to grant me a genuinely happy family--one in which everyone loves and respects each other.*
Hi, Khinenwe. Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. Sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you. J.
*As to the grammar, just a few minor errors, so be sure to review it line by line. As to your situation, I am truly sorry to hear about it. No one should have to live like that. Is there not a third party who can intervene? A relative of your father, a monk, or a government official? Regardless, from afar, I wish not only for your suffering to end, but also for you and for your mom somehow to find more enjoyable lives…
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