An ad for finding a language partner in our school .Please help revise it. Thx
I'm looking for language partners to practice English. If you are a native English speaker who wants to learn Chinese or fit in life in ECNU more quickly, please contact me.
I am now a Ph.D. student in Education faculty. I’ve been studying and living in Shanghai for five years, so I know the city very well. I am a girl with bright personality. I like fitness, outdoor sports, dancing and cooking. In my spare time, I often go to see exhibitions and take part in some interesting activities. I hope we have some hobbies and topics in common. It would be great we become good friends. Feel free to contact me.
Best regards from,
Cassie
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I am looking for language partners to practice English. If you are a native English speaker who wants to learn Chinese or to fit in with life at ECNU more easily, please feel free to contact me. I am a PhD student in the Education faculty, and have been both living and studying in Shanghai for five years now, so I know the city very well. Ideally, we will have some common hobbies and interests that will serve as the basis for developing a mutually beneficial friendship. In addition to being a woman with bright personality, I like activities, such as outdoor sports, that promote personal fitness, as well as dancing, and cooking. In my spare time, I often enjoy seeing exhibitions, as well as participating in interesting activities. I look forward to meeting you!
With best regards,
Cassie
Hi, Cassie. Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. Sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you. J.
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An ad for finding a language partner in our school .Please help revise it. Thx
I'm looking for language partners to practice English. If you are a native English speaker who wants to learn Chinese or fit in at ECNU more quickly, please contact me. I am now a Ph.D. student in education. I’ve been studying and living in Shanghai for five years, so I know the city very well. I am a girl with a bright personality. I like fitness and the outdoor sports. I also enjoy dancing and cooking. In my spare time, I often go to exhibitions and try to find interesting activities to do. I hope we have some hobbies and interests in common. It would be great if we became good friends. Feel free to contact me.
Best regards from,
Cassie
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