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The Facts of Healthy Country Japan.
Where is the healthiest country? It is Spanish. It is not Japan. There are many health issues in Japan. These problems are hard to solve. People in Japan gets unhealthier than before because mental issues and lifestyle disease are increasing.
There are many people who suffer from mental issues in Japan. First, they feel strong stress by their work. Japan is the worst country at the paid vacation usage rate ranking (Gatayama, 2018). This is shows that Japanese spend much time for their work, and they cannot get enough time to rest and enjoy their enough time. Second, bullying is increasing even it is becoming one of the common social issue in Japan. The rate of bullying in school has been increasing for three years. (Kawano, 2018) In addition, there are many types of bullying, such as workplace bullying and cyber bullying which bullying by using internet. These bullying can cause mental issues, such as PTSD. Thus, people who suffer from mental issue is increasing in Japan.
The health problems that has never happened before appears because of lifestyle. First, obese people are increasing in Japan (Hooper, 2012). Once, common Japanese food style was balanced diet, such as rice, fish and miso soup, but, Japanese often eats western food now. Second, the time spending on exercising is decreasing in Japan. Children came to no longer play outside because video game and smart phone became popular. It is not only problem among children but also adult people. People use public transportation instead of walking or cycling because of transportation developed. Therefore, Japanese lifestyle has changed significantly.
An increase of mental issue and lifestyle disease prove Japanese gets more unhealthier than before. Stress and bad lifestyle lead people to unhealthy. Therefore, people can no longer say, “Japanese is healthy”.
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Can you check and correct my essay??😢
The Facts of Healthy Country Japan.
There are many people who suffer from mental issues in Japan. First, they feel strong stress from their work. Japan is rated the worst country by usage of paid vacation at the paid vacation usage rate ranking (Gatayama, 2018). This is shows that Japanese people spend too much time for at their work, and they cannot get enough time to rest and enjoy their enough free time. Second, bullying is increasing; it is even becoming one of the common social issues in Japan. The rate of bullying in school has been increasing for three years. (Kawano, 2018) In addition, there are many types of bullying, such as workplace bullying and cyber bullying which is bullying on the by using internet. These This bullying can cause mental issues, such as PTSD. Thus, the amount of people who suffer from mental issues is increasing in Japan.
These health problems that has never happened before appears because of lifestyle. First, the number of obese people are increasing in Japan (Hooper, 2012). Once, common Japanese food style was a balanced diet, such as rice, fish and miso soup, but now Japanese people often eats western food now. Second, the time spent spending on exercising is decreasing in Japan. Children came to no longer play outside because video game and smart phone became are more popular. It is not only a problem among children but also among adult people. People use public transportation instead of walking or cycling because of transportation developed transportation. Therefore, the Japanese lifestyle has changed significantly.
An increase of mental issues and lifestyle changes prove Japanese people gets are more unhealthier than ever before. Stress and bad lifestyle lead people to unhealthiness. Therefore, people can no longer say, “the Japanese are healthy”.
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