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Storytellers: practice your English
В игру не хотите поиграть? Давайте попробуем вместе написать небольшой рассказ. Я начну, а вы продолжайте. Каждый участник добавляет фразу, предложение или несколько предложений к тому, что уже написано предыдущим участником.  И потом посмотрим, что у нас в конечном итоге получится :-)  Идея ясна, да? I’ll translate it all into English now in case non-Russian speakers decide to join us. We are going to write a story together, every participant adds a phrase/sentence or a few sentences to what is already written.

Я начинаю. I am posting the beginning:

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So here the story goes on:
 
“Does is never snow on Shire?”
“Snow? That’s what is called snow then?” said the voice.
“Oh”, said Tommy, not registering the question, “how nice it must be to travel like you, from planet to planet and see different places and things.”
“Oh yes,” said the voice. “Don’t you travel?”
“No, I never did,” said Tommy with a sigh.
“Would you like to?” . . .
 
Waiting for continuation.
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Right, silver it is then
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Oh! Sorry, I think I've made terrible mistakes! Here is the summary:
"covers" should be covered, and I can't use wherever here. It is a TOTALLY wrong sentence here! Oh, my god! (a beautiful place wherever is covered with snow - is it right?)
The artical before amazing should be "an" but not "a".
And at last, have you ever seen a very large and very wide ground coverd with snow? It is silver, different with the normally "white snow" : )
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Hi Snakeqx,
 
I am glad you are back! :)
Interesting continuation of the story (as always!). I’ll make a few corrections and go on:
 
“I am from the planet Shire - a beautiful place all covered with green plants. Not like here.”  It stopped for a little while, as if wanting to add something, but the words didn’t come out. “I mean, look at this! Covered with silver! What an amazing sight!”
“I know,” said Tommy, feeling more confident now, “The snow is beautiful, isn’t it? Does is never snow on Shire?” . . .
 
P.S. When saying ‘covered with silver’ were you referring to the snow or something else? If it’s the snow, I am not sure if ‘silver’ is the right word here. Perhaps ‘white’ would be better, what do you think?
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Hi Miss Smith and Effector!

"I am from the planet Shire - a beautiful place wherever covers with green plants. Not like here," it stopped a little while, looked as if it wanted to say something, but the words didn't come out, " I mean, look at here! coverd with silver! What a amazing sight!"

continue, please:)

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