Could somebody correct any grammatical problems in my essay? Hi, I am just about to submit my essay for applying to the school! Before I submit this, I really want someone to check up any grammatical problems or flow of the entire essay.(Actually, the essay should be 1-2 page so I didn't write that long and I know that it's kinda too rushing at the end! I don't know what to do!) This is a little bit embarrassing to show my essay to all people but I've gotta submit this in a few hours! Plz somebody help me! Also, thank you very much in advance! People always tell about the importance of having dreams. They say a person without a dream has no motivation and no future plan since he or she does not worry about having a job or family. Also, they say dreams are what keep us getting through tough times. I am also one of those strong believers who say dreams make us what we are. My dream of making movies has always led me to choose where to put my mind in, and even what kind of life I sincerely want to live. My passion for film has not been created just by an accident. In my family, music and photography have been always present as my mother used to be a pianist and my father is greatly into photography and movies. Naturally, I have been influenced by this artistic environment my parents have created and it made me become to have great interests about music, photography and the mix of both, movies. Thanks to my parents, I was able to develop a wide range of music and movie taste. My first step towards achieving my dream of making films was to join my high school‘s broadcasting club. Having many activities as an engineer, I was able to accumulate various experiences of producing movies from writing scenarios to capturing and editing videos and sounds. After graduation, I kept pursuing my dream, trying to find movie-related activities I could do. For example, I got a job as a person who took charge of photograph and media department in a non-profit organization under UNESCO. It was my first chance to step into the professionals’ world though I did not get paid. However, I started feeling that it is not enough for me since I became to realize that even though I worked in the professionals’ world I was just an amateur and still inexperienced one who needed more knowledge. It can be said that the cold professionals’ world was an eye opener for me. To upgrade myself, I started looking for higher education, the schools that can offer me academic and practical film studying. Since I have been always dreaming of studying film in (the name of area), the biggest film industry, I began searching schools in (the name of area). Unfortunately, the tuition of famous film schools in **** and *** was much higher than I expected. However, searching with patience and effort, I finally found (the name of the school I’m applying to). ( ) was the school I had been looking for, which would offer film studies course for less expensive tuition. Also, the location was also perfect as it is in the main stream of film industry. What most attracted me was the highest transfer rate to *** schools since I am also one of the students who are willing to study at ***’s film schools. For these reasons, ( ) will be my best choice. I believe it is the right place to attend for me to transfer into a four year college afterwards. I am positive that ( ) would be my first key steps towards accomplishing my dreams and goals in career.