is this a sentence right ? The tennis racket you are holding looks similar Maria Sharapova's tennis racket.

Is this paragraph right ? Hello, I am the applicant XXX who applyed for admission to your company, Financial Department. I majored in Mathematics in XXX University located in Seoul. I used to work in Business Planning Department, IT company named XXX. I am strong and sincere commitment, and once committed to finish what I start. Also, always think positively, and had a healthy thinking. Me in charge of this nature to your business and are sure it will be helpful. The incident really want for your business and are prepared to work hard. Thank you for.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself Hello. My name is Peter. I want to learn English and have good friend on web. Please contack me If you wnat to learn Korean. :)