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Although young people are more athletic and generally live longer than the elders, it doesn’t mean their life are as enjoyable as some older experts who appreciate what they have in life and live life to the fullest. In my opinion, elders are more enjoyable based on psychology, experience, and relationship.
In Psychological perspective, youth is not a time of life, it’s a state of mind. When I took my driver license test, there was an elder couple took a motorbike drive test at the same time. They wore white hair but a blush of excitement on their face. I had thought motorbikes were something for youngers, but the couple changed my mind, because they still got the spirit of adventure and the courage to challenge themselves, they were as active as freshmen and still felt excited about every sunrise in the morning.
Besides that, elders have more experience and know what’s beneficial. Youths are more likely to rush to dangerous situations such as using drugs and being drunk, but elders who have learned lessons from the past know how to avoid being sunk into these darkest holes, and they are more grateful about everything god gives, so they treat their body with respect and live everyday as a treasure in their lives.
Last but not the least, elders have more valuable relationship. They have more friends who are supportive and more family members like grandchildren. When they meet with trouble, there’s easy for them to find true friends who can help in the first aid; when they feel depressed, there are more family members who can listen and share emotions. Supported by others, elders can live life easier and more enjoyable.
In conclusion, elders know better to live life with respect and have more assistance to deal with problems so that they are more enjoyable no matter how many days are left in their lives.