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( part 3 ) A personal statement, can someone help me by correcting this essay?
XXXX made a very good impression on me, promoting specialist with innovative concept, who are creative, open-minded and deeply passionate about their professional areas. What is really important for me is that XXXX has high morals, treats designers in a good, equal way and teaches the students to pay close attention to the quality of their designed products. This is such a special, modern College compiling technical and artistic aspect together, where the atmosphere is very special and students can make original designs. What I really like in this School’s educational system is the freedom to actively take part in diversified projects. Also, they respect traditional style of art. To add, XXXX has one of the best workshops in the whole Europe with high level of technology and advanced hi-tech equipment, which enables accomplishing even the very difficult projects and tasks. I want to independently work on creative designs, which will be different from others. I know I will find inspiration in this place and train my abilities. After graduation I plan to create my own brand which will mix Chinese traditional elements with modern western culture. I hope I can create new quality according to my vision, develop my own, special style.
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( part 2 ) A personal statement, can someone help me by correcting this essay?
What’s more, when I was founding the company with my friends I learnt many skills. From recruiting new staff, task distribution, renting a building for our own shop, designing our products and their package, to setting our target costumers, analyzing the needs of different groups of clients, boosting advertisement campaign in social media, creating the company’s website. We also planned in which direction our company should develop. That time I realized that when running the business on our own, we have to take into consideration many aspects, not only these related directly to job. Leadership, communication and other soft skills are also very important and should not be neglected. We are facing challenges every day, thinking how to build a strong brand, enhance costumers to buy our products, efficiently communicate with different kind of people and modernize our company.
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( part 1 ) A personal statement, can someone help me by correcting this essay?
To begin with, I developed deep passion towards the industrial design field. I think that the decision about the future career was also influenced by my love for technical products and for life. I pay very close attention to details of these things. I watch the composition of colors, different shapes, the materials, how they are packed. I am creating their image in my mind, thinking how I can use them. I believe that the products we use every day are very important part of our life, we simply cannot function without them. Although, they are something more than just practical tools, which enable the humanity to survive. The goods and their design could be very inspirational. In my eyes they are the masterpieces. I think that the professional industrial designs are the foundation on which we can develop disciplines like: art, economics, engineering and other fields crucial for the modern society.
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