please rectify the mistake and unproper words in my essay...02
3C2
The picture show us that the situation of using water in our country is very bad.We can see on the left part,all of the crops have been dead as the severe drought.On the contrary,the right part,a great quantity of water is overflowing and being wasted.I think that these scenes which picture expresses is very contradictory!The crops would grow very well if we irrigated it by the water which was wasted in right part of picture.
Water resources is one of most important natural resourses,which is very precious,significant,and you know,it can effect on our body directly.As is known:a man can maintain his life 7 days without food,but no more than 3 days without water!
Our country China---the biggest agricultural country in the world.What is more,our country also undertakes about 1.3 billions people on just approximates 9.6 millions square kilometers.And, there are about 0.9 billion farmers,most of places are rural areas.The facts above---mentioned signs China is shortage of water.So it is very liabe to image how water important for people,specially for us.However,the tragedy in China is the phenomenon of water waste,which occurs as common as people’s daily life!Particularly in some big prosperous cities,people who are borned here not only have no awareness to save water,but also waste water and think water just is money---water is indefinite!(That you would not to amaze for the scenes of right part of picture,if you depend on the false notion.)What a false idea is.Unfortunately,in most rural areas,the water providing is very insufficient,even not.Do you think you have money signifies you possess the water in here?Certainly not!Without water,how can those farmers live?How can they irrigate?And can you conceive of what the farmers will be without any output by the end of year?It is a critical、 fatal frustration for them.
So,in short please save water save life,it is not only a good behavior,but also a beautiful virtue,which is inherited about 5000 years in this land.
Finally,please turn off the tap immediatelly when you watch the scene which likes the right part of picture.

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please rectify the mistake and unproper words in my essay...02
3C2
The picture show us that the situation of using water in our country is very bad.We can see on the left part,all of the crops have been dead as the severe drought.On the contrary,the right part,a great quantity of water is overflowing and being wasted.I think that these scenes which picture expresses is very contradictory!The crops would grow very well if we irrigated it by the water which was wasted in right part of picture.
Water resources is one of most important natural resourses,which is very precious,significant,and you know,it can effect on our body directly.As is known:a man can maintain his life 7 days without food,but no more than 3 days without water!
Our country China---the biggest agricultural country in the world.What is more,our country also undertakes about 1.3 billions people on just approximates 9.6 millions square kilometers.And, there are about 0.9 billion farmers,most of places are rural areas.The facts above---mentioned signs China is shortage of water.So it is very liabe to image how water important for people,specially for us.However,the tragedy in China is the phenomenon of water waste,which occurs as common as people’s daily life!Particularly in some big prosperous cities,people who are borned here not only have no awareness to save water,but also waste water and think water just is money---water is indefinite!(That you would not to amaze for the scenes of right part of picture,if you depend on the false notion.)What a false idea is.Unfortunately,in most rural areas,the water providing is very insufficient,even not.Do you think you have money signifies you possess the water in here?Certainly not!Without water,how can those farmers live?How can they irrigate?And can you conceive of what the farmers will be without any output by the end of year?It is a critical、  fatal frustration for them.
So,in short please save water save life,it is not only a good behavior,but also a beautiful virtue,which is inherited about 5000 years in this land.
Finally,please turn off the tap immediatelly when you watch the scene which likes the right part of picture.

Answer

Here again and with some of MY mistakes corrected.


The picture show us that the situation of using water in our country is very bad. We can see that on the left side of the picture the crops have died as a result of the severe drought. In contrast, the right side shows a great quantity of water being wasted. I think that this picture illustrates two very different problems. The crops would have grown very well if they had been irrigated using the water that had been wasted. Water one of the most important natural resources. It is very precious. Water has a direct effect on the human body. A person can stay alive for at least seven days without food but no longer than three days without water! 
Our country China is the biggest agricultural country in the world. Approximately 1.3 billion people live on approximately 9.6 million square kilometers of land. There are about 0.9 billion farmers and much of the country is rural. It is very easy to understand how important water is for Chinese people. Sadly, the phenomenon of water waste is very common in China. Many of the people born in the large prosperous cities here not only have no awareness of water conservation, they think that there is an infinite supply of water. This is a very unfortunate misconception. Unfortunately, in most rural areas, the water supply is very inadequate. With insufficient water, how can farmers live? How can they irrigate? This is an incredibly frustrating situation for farmers to be in. 
In short, saving water saves life. It is not only good behavior but also a beautiful virtue.

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Hi there,
I have edited what you have written. maybe you will like it even better now. Hopefully I have not changed your meaning in any way.
Best wishes.
                     Jan (Pronounced 'Yun')    alexagnabi@hotmail.com


The picture show us that the situation of using water in our country is very bad. We can see that on the left side of the picture the crops have died as a result of the severe drought. In contrast, the right side shows a great quantity of water being wasted. I think that this picture illustrates two very different problems. The crops would have grown very well if they had been irrigated using the water that had been wasted. Water one of the most important natural resources. It is very precious. ,Water has a direct effect on the human body. A person can stay alive for at least seven days without food, but no longer than three days without water! 
Our country China is the biggest agricultural country in the world. Approximately 1.3 billion live on  approximately 9.6 million square kilometers. There are about 0.9 billion farmers and much of the country is rural. It is very easy to understand how important water important is for Chinese people. Sadly, the phenomenon of water waste is very common in China. Many of the people born in the large prosperous cities here not only have no awareness of water conservation: they think that water comes from infinite sources. This is a very unfortunate misconception. Unfortunately, in most rural areas, the water supply is very iinadequate. With insufficient water, how can farmers live? How can they irrigate? This is an incredibly frutrating situation for farmers to be in.
In short, saving water saves life. It is not only good behavior, but also a beautiful virtue.

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