Can anyone help me with this cover letter?
Dear HR ,

I graduated with honors in Economics & Management from the University of Rome Tor Vergata.
I did a six-month advanced training course at "Italiadecide - School for public policies".
Then, I graduated in economics and finance with honors. The characterizing exams were Risk management and securities market economics (options, futures and other derivatives).
In addition, there is the consolidation of knowledge regarding national and international banking and financial regulations thanks to the II level University Master Course in "Regulation of markets and financial intermediaries". Both obtained at Luiss Guido Carli.

Question

Can anyone help me with this cover letter?
Dear HR ,

I graduated with honors in Economics & Management from the University of Rome Tor Vergata.
I did a six-month advanced training course at "Italiadecide - School for public policies".
Then, I graduated in economics and finance with honors. The characterizing exams were Risk management and securities market economics (options, futures and other derivatives).
In addition, there is the consolidation of knowledge regarding national and international banking and financial regulations thanks to the II level University Master Course in "Regulation of markets and financial intermediaries". Both obtained at Luiss Guido Carli.

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I would say “I had to study more than 14 hours a day to achieve my academic goals.” 
“I learn quickly, AND my dedication is extreme.”

There are a few places where you need commas. Otherwise very clear and well-written.

“During my academic career, I won...” 
“I come from a humble family, and that is why...”

No need of a comma here: “in student rooms in close contact with...”

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