Can some one correct my sentences? Is there a mistake in my sentence?
Hello there! This is Oliver. I have recently changed my number kindly update your contact list with my new number thanks!
Does any one find a mistake in this sentence or any other better words can some one tell

Question

Can some one correct my sentences? Is there a mistake in my sentence?
Hello there! This is Oliver.  I have recently changed my number kindly update your contact list with my new number thanks! 
Does any one find a mistake in this sentence or any other better words can some one tell

Answer

The only mistake is lack of punctuation. Your last sentence is actually three clauses, so the three clauses need to be separated by punctuation:

I have recently changed my number. Kindly update your contact list with my new number. Thanks!

Also, Bill is right, so to make it simpler, remove "with my new number":

I have recently changed my number. Kindly update your contact list. Thanks!

Answer

Hi, this is Oliver, please can you update your contact list with my number which is 12345?

Since you mention "update" you don't need "new"

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