Would you like to help me to correct my composition?
Dear friends,
I am very glad that we have spent nearly four years in the
university.The purpose of writing the letter is to offer some adice on a emerging new problem ——the sanitation of dormitory.
Dormitory is our environment of living. It is clean and tidy, which can provide us with a good atmosphere for study and life. I will give the following suggestions.
First of all, the most important thing is to clear the garbage every day. Especially,the rest of the lunch box and food waste should be thrown away. Secondly, it is best not to put socks and other clothes on the radiator in the dormitory. Please try to change your socks more frequently.
I hope we can do well in this and create civilized dormitories together. I'm sure we can spend the rest of our college days together.
yours sincerely
Li ming

Question

Would you like to help me to correct my   composition?
Dear friends,
I am very glad that we have spent nearly four years in the
university.The purpose of writing the letter is to offer some adice on a emerging new problem ——the sanitation of dormitory.
Dormitory is our environment of living. It is clean and tidy, which can provide us with a good atmosphere for study and life. I will give the following suggestions.
First of all, the most important thing is to clear the garbage every day.  Especially,the rest of the lunch box and food waste should be thrown away. Secondly, it is best  not to put socks and other clothes on the radiator in the dormitory. Please try to change your socks more frequently.
I hope we can do well in this and create civilized dormitories together. I'm sure we can spend the rest of our college days together.
yours sincerely
Li ming

Answer

Dear friends,
I have enjoyed our years together in the university.  The purpose of writing this letter is to offer my opinion on a emerging problem: the sanitation of our dormitory.
A clean and tidy dormitory environment provides us with a good atmosphere for study and life. I respectfully offer the following suggestions.
First of all, the most important thing is to clear the garbage every day especially the remainders of the lunch box and food waste. Second, it is best  not to put socks and other clothes on the radiators in the dormitory.  Please try to change your socks more frequently. (what does this sentence have to do with the previous?)

I hope that together we can make our dormitories a more civilized place.  I look forward to our remaining college days together.

Yours sincerely,

Answer

Dear Friends,

I am very glad that we have spent nearly four years in the university (together).  The purpose of writing (this) letter is to offer some (advice) on (an) emerging new problem - (dormitory sanitation).
Dormitory is our environment of living.  It is clean and tidy, which can provide us with a good atmosphere (to study and live).  
(Here are some of my suggestions).  First of all, the most important thing is to clear the garbage every day.  (In particular,) (old) lunch boxes and (expired) food should be thrown away.  Secondly, it is best not to put socks and other clothes on the radiator in the dormitory.  Please try to change your socks more frequently.  
I hope we can do well in this and create civilized dormitories together.  I'm sure we can spend the rest of our college days together.

Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

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