Thank you all!

Mostly fine. The only change I would make is to say "Please treasure your lives as much as *you* treasure [your] freedom." (the *you* is compulsory because the verb "treasure" must have a subject. The [your] is optional. Is it their own freedom that they treasure (in which case the "your" sounds better), or is it someone else's freedom"my" etc. might be more appropriate), or freedom in general (in which case no possessive is required).

Sounds better like this: I admire your courage and determination, butt guys, you're not bullet-proof. Please treasure your lives as much as you treasure your freedom. We need you safe and sound.