Does this short poem make sense? Can you correct it, please!
I don't like feeling blue
I listen to music to feel-good
Music cheer me up
Music sometimes pick me up

A good mellow song is nice
I start to relax
I become so calm
I realise the weekend is arriving

Having fun is good
Then improve your mood
Listen to music is cool
Let's to listen to rock 'n' roll

Sometimes I feel grumpy
I don't like this so much
I struggle to change
Then I get a good mood

There are songs so catchy
"Clap along if you feel like a room without a roof"
What about improve our mood
Let the life to be good!

Question

Does this short poem make sense? Can you correct it, please!
I don't like feeling blue
I listen to music to feel-good
Music cheer me up
Music sometimes pick me up

A good mellow song is nice
I start to relax
I become so calm
I realise the weekend is arriving

Having fun is good
Then improve your mood
Listen to music is cool
Let's to listen to rock 'n' roll

Sometimes I feel grumpy
I don't like this so much
I struggle to change
Then I get a good mood

There are songs so catchy
"Clap along if you feel like a room without a roof"
What about improve our mood
Let the life to be good!

Answer

In general, the poem makes sense. I'd say you can get your idea across: good music = a good mood. Have fun and enjoy life... totally agree! 
It does require some correction (nothing too big though, so good job!), but I would suggest you request the correction through a notebook entry instead. It'll be easier to point out what needs to be corrected.

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