Unless you’re planning a career in espionage, it’s probably not necessary to “hide” your accent. That being said, improving your pronunciation is the absolute best thing you can do for your listening comprehension skills. There are a few pronunciation issues with vowels and consonants that are probably systemic. Fixing them would be a high priority: once: should be /wʌns/, not /wɑːns/ alone / along: did you say “alone” or “along”? I think you meant “alone,” in which case you need to use a “closed O” — which is actually a diphthong in all standard varieties of English. Try /ʌu/ for General American. her favorite :::::: golden ball: I couldn’t catch that adjective for some reason. there: should be /ðeər/, not /drr/ lilies and daisies and hedges: The rhythm was way off. You were probably distracted by the whole /ɪ/ versus /ɪi/ thing, which you managed to get right (congratulations). The H in “hedges” was more like /x/. This usually won’t be mistaken for /k/, but certainly sounds foreign. Additionally, your prosody, while easy enough to understand, is going to need a lot of practice in order to get to where you can “hide your native accent.” Recommendation: Keep going with your shadowing and similar practices. You don’t necessarily need an expert language coach like me to help you acquire a native-like accent, but you should at least find a community tutor who will be brutally honest in correcting your pronunciation (if you are truly determined to hide your accent.

i like your accent, and I think you are good. But I understand wanting to remove original accent for personal challenge. so to answer your question: You are doing good, but the flow is not right. you seem to take single syllable words and stretch them into two syllables at times, also putting a distinct change in pitch during the word. For example the sentence "no one was ever there to catch the ball". When you said "ball" you made two syllable out of it and a fall and rise in pitch. English speakers would keep this word short, not drawn out, and slight fall in pitch or no change at all as we hit the end of that sentence. That same sentence you did something similar with "there". need to focus on the rise and fall of english, when it's choppy and when it flows smoother. You are saying most words kind of correct put putting the wrong inflection and making some too long and others too short. The sentence "one day when she was running around ....", the things you listed out became too choppy, this part should flow more smoothly with a slight rise and fall from the higher pitch "and" and a slightly lower pitch "daisies" for example. Think of speaking this part like a waltz dance, rising and falling gently over the list. Agree with Phil. get a language partner that can be brutally honest and a careful ear for pitches etc.

I think you did a pretty good job. I could obviously still hear your accent but your voice was clear and I didn't have a hard time hearing the words you were saying. Keep up the good work!