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I translated a poem into English,give me some advices,please~:) you were the spring breeze went by my life gently nothing but left me a break heart tell me how can i find your track i was waiting for your love waiting here like a tree of winter bloomed the aspiration into flowers standing here still for you i was a tree of winter missing you i was a tree of winter awaiting you I knew you would never know what happened so i put all the worry in my heart 你像一阵春风 拂过了我的生命 却只留下了一段伤心给我 让我无法寻觅你的影踪 我在这里等你 等成了一棵冬天的树 把对你的思念 开成了花朵 静静地守候着你 经过 我是一棵冬天的树 我在想你 我是一棵冬天的树 我在等你 我知道这一切都无法有结局 我只能够把这一切放在心里

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you were like a spring breeze just passing gently by my life left me nothing but a broken heart disappeared without a trace i'm here waiting for u holding out and waiting like a tree in winter my longing for u that i've nurtured like a flower is now in full bloom calmly waiting for u to pass through again like a tree in winter missing u i'm this tree in winter just waiting for u i know it will go on like this forever so i have no choice but to keep all this in my heart
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yuyan made good points. I'll highlight sentences with problems: went by my life gently that went gently by my life nothing but left me a break heart leaving nothing but a broken heart bloomed the aspiration my aspiration bloomed That's just literal grammar stuff. I would suggest adding punctuation (although poetry doesn't have to have it), at least to end sentences. You might also try adding a blank line to seperate sections, like paragraphs in prose. Thanks for posting poetry! I hope you do more and share it with us!
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sorry to say so but the translation site which you have used does not properly translate the poem.

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