Looking at my collection of photos of sparrows, I was reminded of one of my favorite stories. It was about a boy who wanted to turn into a sparrow, mistakenly thinking that it is only people have to learn and work, and if he turned into someone else, life would immediately become fun and interesting. The original was too long - a run-on sentence as we call it. I split it into two sentences.

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"Looking at my photo collection of sparrows, I was reminded of one of my favorite stories, about a boy who wanted to turn into a sparrow, mistakenly thinking that it is only people have to learn and work, and if he turned into something else-life would immediately become fun and interesting" Two little changes in the first and last line - interesting story!