can you check my writing? please
l don't think kids under highschool age need smartphone. Usually, children under high school spend rest of the time at school under teacher's care. and after school, they go to home directly or some of them go to academy. and also there's some adults who look after them. So, they rarely have the urgent , dangerous circumstance to call their parents .
The other reason is that, smartphone distracts them from studying. They can brouse the internet, or play games, and texting their friends all the time.
For these reasons, l don't think kids need smartphone.

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can you check my writing? please
l don't think kids under highschool age need smartphone. Usually, children under high school spend rest of the time at school under teacher's care. and after school, they go to home directly or some of them go to academy. and also there's some adults who look after them. So, they rarely have the urgent , dangerous circumstance to call their parents . 
The other reason is that, smartphone distracts them from studying. They can brouse the internet, or play games, and texting their friends all the time.
For these reasons, l don't think kids need smartphone.

THANK YOU![emoji]

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If you'd like your writing to be corrected, it may be better to post it as a notebook entry instead. Notebook corrections allow the use of formatting tools that make corrections much easier to read and write.

I agree with you though. I actually didn't have a smartphone until I was in college.

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l don't think kids under highschool age need A smartphone. Usually, children under high school spend MOST of theIR time at school under THE teacher's care. and after school, they go xx home directly or some of them go to AN academy. and also there ARE some adults who look after them. So, they rarely have AN urgent , dangerous circumstance WHERE THEY NEED to call their parents . 
The other reason is that A smartphone distracts them from studying. They can broWse the internet, or play games, and textxx their friends all the time.
For these reasons, l don't think kids need A smartphone.

Corrections in capitals  xx = something removed from the text.

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For me that is ok... and I agree that smartphones are not for kids.

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Me gusta, pienso que sabes escribir muy bien inglés :p

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