is it right?
Could you check my tiny entry, please)

Hurray! Extremely soon in our center there will be the first in this season meeting of project "Welcome to us".
Traditionally, we have played for a small prize. Congratulations to our winner, Ann, who had answered our question absolutelly correctly. It's a CD-disk with autograph of music band "The Smith's dogs". Ann, your present will wait for you on the meeting. And for all others, everybody can come to us and listen to thrilling stories and legends of ancient North which will be choosen and told by our talented story-teller, Tom.

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is it right?
Could you check my tiny entry, please)

Hurray! Extremely soon in our center there will be the first in this season meeting of project "Welcome to us".
Traditionally, we have played for a small prize. Congratulations to our winner, Ann, who had answered our question absolutelly correctly. It's a CD-disk with autograph of music band "The Smith's dogs".  Ann, your present will wait for you on the meeting. And for all others, everybody can come to us and listen to thrilling stories and legends of ancient North which will be choosen and told by our talented story-teller, Tom.

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Hurray: celebration. Choose a different greeting, like "Hi there!"
Our center will be hosting the season's first "Welcome" very soon.
Traditionally, our prizes are small. (I would not include this sentence, though)
..., who answered our question correctly.
She wins a "Smith's Dogs" CD with autograph.
... will be waiting for you at the meeting.
And to all others: Please come and listen to .... of the Ancient North, which will be chosen and narrated by...

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Would you kindly post this as a Notebook entry at https://www.italki.com/notebooks? It has tools we can use to highlight the changes we make. That way, it is easier for you to see what was corrected. Thank you.

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