please help me correct this sentence, thank you!
THE ORIGINAL SENTENCE IS "LIFE IS NOT A RACE, BUT A JOURNEY TO BE SAVORED EACH STEP OF THE WAY."
AND I HAVE ANOTHER VERSION "LIFE IS NOT A RACE, BUT A JOURNEY, OF WHICH EACH STEP OF THE WAY IS TO BE SAVORED."
I GUESS THE GRAMMAR OF BOTH SENTENCES IS RIGHT, I JUST WANT A BETTER EXPRESSION.

THANK YOU FOR YOUR HELP!

Question

please help me correct this sentence, thank you!
THE ORIGINAL SENTENCE IS "LIFE IS NOT A RACE, BUT A JOURNEY TO BE SAVORED EACH STEP OF THE WAY."
AND I HAVE ANOTHER VERSION "LIFE IS NOT A RACE, BUT A JOURNEY, OF WHICH EACH STEP OF THE WAY IS TO BE SAVORED."
I GUESS THE GRAMMAR OF BOTH SENTENCES IS RIGHT, I JUST WANT A BETTER EXPRESSION.

THANK YOU FOR YOUR HELP!

Answer

LIFE IS NOT A RACE, BUT A JOURNEY, EACH STEP OF WHICH IS TO BE SAVORED."

This alternative would be correct.  When you reformulate it like you have done, we bring together "journey" and "way" which are synonymous, and so only one is necessary.

The original sounds better, in my view.

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Hello! In my personal opinion, the first one is the better expression because it is less complicated and goes straight to the idea.
Hope this helps!

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