寫得唔好！我知道有嘅 (啲) 寫得唔對 (啱)。謝謝！(唔該would be more natural in spoken Cantonese) 我好中(鍾)意打功夫。我而加打嘅係截拳道，既(即)係中國香港明星李小龍嘅功夫。佢覺得傳統中國功夫唔係都幾好(都唔係幾好or唔夠好)，好有限。所以佢做佐新個功夫种(This sentence sounds a bit strange, you would say:所以佢自創咗一種新功夫)。 我已經打佐(咗)三年啦。我就係我啲屋企附近咯學校學 (我就喺我屋企附近嘅學校學)，而且我每日係(喺)屋企練習。練習好辛苦，但係我會繼續練習下去 (下去is written Chinese, we say繼續練習落去)。我嘅老師都係香港人，我好中意而加可以同他用敢廣東話講嘢啦 (我好鍾意而家可以用,同夠膽用廣東話同佢講嘢啦) 我都中(鍾)意好多种運動。我時時去走路(I'm not sure, did you want to say散步?) 同踢足球 (踢足球is quite formal, you would say 踢波too) 。 我每個星期6同好多朋友一起(一起is written Chinese,一齊would be better)去踢。 I hope it could help you a bit. You're awesome! Your Chinese is very good! Cantonese is very difficult to learn, especially the pronounciation. Hang on there!!

既係中國香港明星李小龍嘅功夫..(打錯字？應該係「即」呀嘛～) 佢覺得傳統中國功夫唔係都幾好，好有限。所以佢做佐新個功夫种。 (唔係幾好就得啦。個都字可以唔洗) 我就係我啲屋企附近咯學校學(屋企得一個，所以唔洗「啲」..同埋應該係附近間學校學) 我好中意而加可以同他用敢廣東話講嘢啦("敢"字可以唔要) 希望幫到你，其實你d廣東話都好好la，加油~~