Can you help me with my body paragraph (essay)
Hello everyone, Can you help me with the grammatical mistakes in my writing.
Kids don’t have to be thinking about the cost of living by their owns because their parents have the duty of paying all Children’s needs, such as, clothing, nutrition, education, transportation ,a safe place where to live, entertainment needs, etc. They have everything and free. Unlike the kids, Adults keep in a constant pressure caused by the cost of living by your own. Isn’t easy living by your own because you must pay the water, electricity, gas, satellite television, internet, and phone bill. Moreover, you have to pay the rent, buy clothing, food and don’t forget the transport.
My essay is about why being a kid is better than being a adult.
Thanks for reading my writing :D
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Hi Buckethead,
Here you go. I tried to make as few changes as possible, keeping the meaning the same but making ti grammatically correct and more natural sounding.
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Kids don’t have to be thinking about the cost of living on their own because their parents have the duties of paying all children’s needs, such as clothing, nutrition, education, transportation, a safe place to live, entertainment needs, etc. They receive everything for free. Unlike the kids, adults feel the constant pressure caused by the costs of living by your own. It isn’t easy living on your own because you must pay for the water, electricity, gas, satellite television, Internet, and phone. Moreover, you have to pay the rent, buy clothing, food and don’t forget transportion.
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