Would you like to help me to correct my sentence?
The first one is "Would you like to help me to correct my sentence?"

Another one is:
"
Spoon-feed can just only stifle kids' creativity. In addition to this, they waste their time.
"

As the second one, is my using 'in addition to this' right.

Recently, I reaaly lack confidence of writing, I usually fear my writing with mistake.

Thanks!

Question

Would you like to help me to correct my sentence?
The first one is "Would you like to help me to correct my sentence?"

Another one is:
"
Spoon-feed can just only stifle kids' creativity. In addition to this, they waste their time.
"

As the second one, is my using 'in addition to this'  right.

Recently, I reaaly lack confidence of writing, I usually fear my writing with mistake.

Thanks!

Answer

Hi Jesse,
It's hard to tell the context in which you are saying these sentences, but I would say them like this:

1) "Can you help me by correcting this sentence?" or simply "Can you correct this sentence?"
2) "Spoon-feeding children stifles their creativity. It is also a waste of time."

In general, I would use the word "additionally" to start a sentence rather than "in addition to this". Other ways to say the same thing include "also", "moreover" and "furthermore".

Don't worry, you're doing great! Making mistakes is perfectly normal - even us native speakers constantly make mistakes :)

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