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Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing with regard to your advertisement for trips round the world on the new Space Bus that I saw in «The Daily News» on the 2nd February. I am very interested in such a trip. However, I would like to receive some further information.

I would be grateful if you could tell me how much 6-hour trip for one adult and two kids would cost. I wonder if you could let me know if 6-hour trip is enough to enjoy the Earth from space.

Could you inform me if there are available seats on the 24th July and if there are I would like to book them.

Could you also tell me if my children or I can feel sick on the new Space Bus?

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

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Check my composition!
Here's my composition! Please check it and correct my mistakes! Thanks in advance!

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing with regard to your advertisement for trips round the world on the new Space Bus that I saw in «The Daily News» on the 2nd February. I am very interested in such a trip. However, I would like to receive some further information.

I would be grateful if you could tell me how much 6-hour trip for one adult and two kids would cost. I wonder if you could let me know if 6-hour trip is enough to enjoy the Earth from space.

Could you inform me if there are available seats on the 24th July and if there are I would like to book them.

Could you also tell me if my children or I can feel sick on the new Space Bus?

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully, 
 
******** ******

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Hi Tatiana,

Here's how I would write it:

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing with *regards* to your advertisement for trips *around* the world on the new Space Bus that I saw in «The Daily News» on the 2nd February. I am very interested in such a trip*, however, I would like to receive some further information.

I would be grateful if you could tell me how much *a 6 hour* trip for one adult and two kids would cost*?*. I wonder if you could let me know if *a 6 hour* trip is enough to enjoy the Earth from space*?*.

Could you inform me if there are available seats on the 24th July and*,* if there are*,* I would like to book them.

Could you also tell me if my children or I *could* feel sick on the new Space Bus?

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

******** ******

Nice work!

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