One change I would make is change ''In'' out for ''During'' So it should look like this, ''During the dynamic music,'' Good job over all though.

"To dynamic music, ladies paraded down the catwalk in their national costume, evening dress, and swimsuits successively." Was a little confused at first by the "In the dynamic music" bit, but thought you must have meant that they were walking to the beat of dynamic music. If I'm wrong, please identify what you did mean :) Greetz