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Is any English native user will help me to polish my 'career objective'? Hi everyone, I will apply for a job soon, and the 'career objective' is a part of my CV. If you have working experience, could you please help me to polish my career objective and make it more professioanl? Thank you! I will paste it below: I did my internship in a popular tourism town in Australia, and I found that hotels and resorts created the biggest revenue for the government. The situation is as the same as my hometown. Since I have experience in ‘Event Management’, I prefer to start my career in the same field. Hopefully I will have the chance to be promoted the event sales manager in the foreseeable years. I will put my enthusiasm to my job, and be familiar with that how the whole hotel works, especially how to control the budget. To be a generally manager is my long-term goal, in the 25 years.

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I did my internship in a popular tourism town in Australia, and I found that hotels and resorts created the biggest revenue for the government. The situation is the same as in my hometown. "as" removed "in" added Since I have experience in ‘Event Management’, I prefer to start my career in the same field. I would not put ‘Event Management’ in quotes. If you must, use proper quotation marks "" Hopefully I will have the chance to be promoted to events sales manager in the foreseeable future. "to events sales" "years" changed to "future" - this seems to me a strange thing to say. I will put my enthusiasm into my job, and be familiar with how the whole hotel works, especially how to control the budget. "in" --> "into" "that" removed To be a generally manager is my long-term goal, in 25 years. "the" removed Do you need to say "in 25 years"? long-term is long term.
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