Can you correct my professional presentation, it's for my degree!!! PART 2
The first days, my colleagues treated me in a relaxed manner with a business-like way.
Of course, in the first week, I was given a tour of the facility to know my way around and understand the activities and strategies of the company.My tutor and director is called Serge Winter. It’s him who gives me different projects to achieve.
My main activity is the "Marketing and Communication" of the company. I’m so in charged of the Marketing. I take part in the development of the turnover in using “Information and Communication Technologies”.
I worked on the creation of sales brochures, of website, of emailing, in establishing a CRM “Customer RelationShip Management”, a graphics charter, and commercial offers. For these tasks, I worked under the supervision of my tutor who helped me to do this development work. On the workplace, I work on a PC Windows with a server. I used many software like Word, Excel, Publisher, Photoshop, InDesign, and Chrome as internet browser.

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Can you correct my professional presentation,  it's for my degree!!! PART 2
The first days, my colleagues treated me in a relaxed manner with a business-like way.
Of course, in the first week, I was given a tour of the facility to know my way around and understand the activities and strategies of the company.My tutor and director is called Serge Winter. It’s him who gives me different projects to achieve. 
My main activity is the "Marketing and Communication" of the company. I’m so in charged of the Marketing. I take part in the development of the turnover in using “Information and Communication Technologies”. 
I worked on the creation of sales brochures, of website, of emailing, in establishing a CRM “Customer RelationShip Management”, a graphics charter, and commercial offers. For these tasks, I worked under the supervision of my tutor who helped me to do this development work.  On the workplace, I work on a PC Windows with a server. I used many software like Word, Excel, Publisher, Photoshop, InDesign, and Chrome as internet browser.

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It's better that you post it in Notebook, so that you can see the corrections in colour.

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From the start, my colleagues treated me in a relaxed yet professional manner. Of course, in the first week I toured the facility and familiarized myself with the activities and strategies of the company. My tutor and director is called “Serge Winter.” He gives me different projects to complete.

My main activity is the “Marketing and Communication” of the company. I am in charge of marketing and I take part in the development of (the turnover)* using “Information and Communication Technologies.”

I have worked on the creation of sales brochures, the website, and emails. I have also assisted with establishing a CRM (Customer Relationship Management), a graphics charter, and commercial offers. My tutor supervised me on these tasks and helped me with this development work. (or maybe: “My tutor supervised me on these tasks and helped with developing this work.”??) With my workplace PC I utilize Microsoft software such as: Word, Excel, and Publisher, as well as other programs like: Photoshop, InDesign, and (google?) Chrome as an internet browser.

*"the turnover" of what??

Hope this helps. Sorry my paragraph spacing was off in part one.

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Correction to my correction: ....in a relaxed and business-like manner.

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Laurea, vous recevrez plus de réponses si vous listez votre text sous"Notebook". Il serait plus facile pour faire des corrections.

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The first days, my colleagues treated me in a relaxed manner in a business-like manner.

Of course, in the first week, I was given a tour of the facility to know my way around and understand the activities and strategies of the company. My tutor and director is Serge Winter. It’s he who assigns different projects to me.

My main activity in the company is Marketing and Communication. I’m also in charge of the Marketing. I take part in the development of the turnover by using “Information and Communication Technologies”.

I worked on the creation of our sales brochures, website design and E-mail system as well as establishing a Customer Relationship Management program (CRM), a policy for graphics, and commercial offers.

I worked on these tasks under the supervision of my tutor who also assisted me with this development work. In the office, I work on a Windows PC connected to a server. I use many software programs like Word, Excel, Publisher, Photoshop, InDesign, and Chrome as the Internet browser.

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