I need your help ! Can you find mistakes and make corrections in this text?
She ran to call the police, but it was too late. She heard approaching steps. His heart was beating at high speed. Rang the bell. Paula did not know what to do, open the door or sit quietly. She chose the latter and began to sit still, but continued to ring bell. The door began to open, and Paula was in shock. "Who could it be?
The door began to creak and in the end was open. Paula was under the bed. Steps walked through the house and went into the room, where was Paula. Unknown man shouted: Daughter, where are you? This mom came!"

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I need your help ! Can you  find mistakes and make corrections in this text?
She ran to call the police, but it was too late. She heard approaching  steps. His heart was beating at high speed. Rang the bell. Paula did not know what to do, open the door or sit quietly. She chose the latter and began to sit still, but continued to ring bell. The door began to open, and Paula was in shock. "Who could it be?
The door began to creak and in the end was open. Paula was under the bed. Steps walked through the house and went into the room, where was Paula. Unknown man shouted: Daughter, where are you? This mom came!"

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There are some sentence fragments. I it is understandable but to an English speaking person it is too choppy.

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Oh, no... I make publishing mistake... Sorry...

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Text of this length should be posted to the Notebook section.  The tools there for marking up corrections makes it much better for this sort of thing.

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