correct my paragraph about noruz Eve
Noruz Eve (Newyear Eve at Iran)
Travelling during Noruze Eve in fact can be killing two birds with one stone.(by being happy and maling others happy)
As we know oneof the best wais for being happy , and healthful is travelling, so by travelling we can be happy, and make others happy, for example if our relatives are far from us , we can travel to them, and make them happy, because as a rule in Iran during Noruz Eve cocation most of families are waiting for guests from their far relatives, so we can have a good time, and enjoy, because the host family tries to prepare all details for their guests to be happy. But if we stay at home and spend our time by watching TV an etc, we will lose our stone.
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New Year's Eve In Iran
While you travel during new year's eve you are killing two birds with one stone by making yourself and others happy. When our relatives are far from us we can travel to them and make them happy by our visit. A common action in iran during new year's eve vacation is that most families are waiting with anticipation as they ready themselves for their reletives to arrive to bring on the good times. Good times, however cannot be accomplished is we had stayed at home watching tv and such therefore losing our moral anchorage.
i rewrote the whole thing as most americans would probably have said or written it. :) your mistakes were that you were repeating words more than you should have so next time try to say things without repeating yourself. :) build your vocabulary
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