Can anybody check my English of my journal of San Gimignano,Italy??Pls!
I managed to arrive at San Gimignano last night. I strolled along the quiet lane within this small walled medieval town after checked in Hotel. And this morning I am very excting to be in a restaurant. How breathtaking the view I see below my eyes out of the windows is!
I`m stunned.There are the mist swifting on the nature.I `m watching the interplay of light and mist for a while. As the sun was rising, the mist was diffusing.
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sato, here's how I would write it:
Last night I arrived at San Gimignano. After I checked into the hotel, I strolled along a quiet lane within this small walled medieval town. This morning I am very excited to be in a restaurant. The view I see from the windows is breathtaking! I'm amazed as I watch the changing mist. I see the interplay of light and mist for awhile. Then I watched the mist melt away as the sun rose.
You've pictured the scene very well, but the sentences needed to be written just a little more clearly.
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Here are some changes I made:
"after I checked in the hotel" "I am very excited" "How breathtaking is the view I see below my eyes out of the windows!" "There is the mist drifting on nature."
Your language is very expressive! Good job! :)
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It's better if you can write it as an notebook entry :)
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