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Help me, Let's correct and add sentence for me (It is myself introduction for my resume. so I want to correct and add sentence my writting) I always keep my honestness. When I’m freshman, I found a briefcase. There is much money in briefcase. I can use lots of money, but I couldn’t. Because I think that honestness is very important in my life. If I work for UNIQLO, I will work based on honesty. So I will get a customer’s trust. Since I was young, my parents teach me to earn allowance myself. I worked to clean up my room and dishes, and I received money to my parents. So I learned independent-mind. It was good effect for me. And I convinced that it will be a good effect for my career. My strengths are positive and outgoing. I want to actively enjoy campus life. So I joined student’s union and be elected president of student’s union. I went to explore M.T and O.T place with my members. And we prepared whole union’s events. So we learned cooperation. While I experienced these active, I learned decision and executive ability. I think that I will perfectly work based on my strengths. I want to have a variety of experience, so I went to study in china. But, I don’t think that study isn’t a whole of my life. So I planed that I make Kim-bab and sell it on the street. At first, I had trouble to sell item. Because chinese haven’t interest to it. But I don’t give up and worked really hard for it. I made free-sample stand and Xiangchai Kim-bab what is all of Chinese like vegetable. It can do that Chinese interest Xiangchai Kim-bab. So I earned much money and be praised to Chinese. I will work based on these freshness, I will contribute to UNIQLO’s growth. In 2005, UNIQLO’s store opened in korea. It gave freshness to me. I think that there are many kinds of design and color’s clothes. And it was cheaper than other store’s items. So I like UNIQLO. And it is very popular brand now. I usually hope that I will be a global person. I convinced that UNIQLO will make my dream. And I want to work for company’s growth. I’m applying for a position in VMD of sales support team. As I’m working VMD, I will work for our customer’s comfort. So I convinced that we give more comfortable shopping circumstance.

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Hi. I just helped you revise the essay through the notebook entry. http://www.italki.com/notebook/entry/51247.htm Hopefully, my suggestions may give you a few ideas. Ciao. --- Good day. / 좋은 하루.
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how much time do you have until you have to submit this cover letter to UNIQLO? I am not free this week...I'll be free after Saturday's exam and then I can correct this entry. Also, I can help you to improve your oral English skills after Saturday. I'll message you my msn id so you can message me anytime you want to practice.

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