Correction is needed.
Hi,
You can read my notebook and correct my leatest entry.
Thank you so much in advance!

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Correction is needed.
Hi,
    You can read my notebook and correct my leatest entry. 
Thank you so much in advance!

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Hi William,
Sorry for my rudeness, I did not mean to be rude. You just taught my a great lesson. I really appreciate it.

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Someone might be more willing to do that if you provide the entry here, or a link to it.

Also, "you can" is used for granting permission informally or giving commands rudely; it's not the right phrase for making a request :-)

Here are two examples of how to make a polite request:

I'd be grateful if you could read my notebook and correct my latest entry.
Would you read my notebook and correct my latest entry, please?

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