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Is there okay with style and gramma in the letter? Correct my errors. Thanks. Condition: You are studying in Leeds and you have seen the following advertisement for a part-time job at a call centre. You are interested in applying for it, but you need more information. Write an email of at least 100 words to Mr Davis in which you: 1) Tell him why you are interested in a part-time job at the call centre, 2) Ask how many shifts you have to do a week and how long each one is, 3) Ask when you need to send in your application and when the interviews will be held. The letter: Dear Mr Davis, My purest gratitude for reading this letter. Having a considerable experience in the speaker’s area and being sufficiently successful as a communicative and empathic man, I drew attention for a part-time job at the call centre you are offering. Because of covid-19, as you may know, many lost their jobs, and labor market is used up all their offers. And I’m interested in this trade, as a breadwinner of my dearest. The only part that matters for me is how long each shift and what its quantity? The question caused by pandemic that is existing now. It’s sure, you abide by the FMLA law, thereby maintaining security of each worker. But, to be sure, I really need to know what conditions in the call centre are. Is there a disinfection after each shift? If pandemic gaining momentum, will cuts be provided to shift in terms of its quantity and duration? I would be very appreciate for answering these significant concerns. If you excuse my little audacity when asking, when I will be needed to send an application and when interviews will be held? In advertisement are following that applications and interviews are being taken and held before 25, 30 of April respectively. Is there any changes? Yours sincerely, Alex

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какая интересная грамматическая конструкция there is okay сами придумали?
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My purest gratitude for reading this letter. //Strange sentence - I would not use “purest gratitude” Having considerable experience in the speaker’s area and being sufficiently successful as a communicative and empathic man, I drew attention for a part-time job at the call centre you are offering. //a part-time job you are offering at the call center drew my attention. Because of covid-19, as you may know, many lost their jobs, and labor market is used up all their offers. //and THE labor market has a job shortage. And I’m interested in this trade, as a breadwinner of my dearest. // get rid of “And” at the beginning of the sentence. The only part that matters for me is how long each shift and what its quantity? //“The only part that matters TO me is how long the shift is and the wage. (I’m not sure what you mean by “quantity” in this context. I think you mean “pay”. The question caused by pandemic that is existing now. //This sentence seems unnecessary and does not have a clear meaning. It’s sure, you abide by the FMLA law, thereby maintaining security of each worker. //I think you mean “I’m sure that you abide by FLMA law...” But, to be sure, I really need to know what conditions in the call centre are. //Use “However” instead of “but” when beginning a sentence. Is there a disinfection after each shift? If THE pandemic GAINS momentum, will cuts be provided to THE shift in terms of its quantity and duration? I would be very APPRECIATIVE IF YOU ANSWERED these significant concerns. If you excuse my little audacity when asking, when WILL I be needed to send an application and when WILL interviews be held? In advertisement are following that applications and interviews are being taken and held before 25, 30 of April respectively. ARE there any changes? Yours sincerely, //Just say “sincerely” - putting “yours” seems to personal for a potential employee to say. Alex //You should put your last name as well

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