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Could you check if the writing is grammatically correct? Iorex, the Best Performance Ionization Water Treatment Equipment in the World! Water is one of the most abundant and the human-friendliest resources on earth Humans have lived with water and water has played a major role in civilization development. Iorex has developed pipe anti-corrosion equipment using carbon to provide clean and healthy water for the first time in the world.

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Grammatically, I would suggest “necessary” in place of “human-friendliest”, which is not grammatical or natural-sounding. “Development of civilization” instead of “civilization development.” From a non-grammatical standpoint, the paragraph has some other problems if you plan to use this as advertising/marketing material — such as the first two sentence make very obvious points that don’t tell your reader anything they don’t already know, and the last sentence makes an overstatement (with regard to “first time in the world”) because lots of people have enjoyed clean and healthy water before Iorex. Maybe you mean that Iorex is the first technology in the world to use carbon to prevent pipe corrosion — which may be a true statement — but that is not what the sentence currently means.

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