Guys please check this short IELTS writing exercise for grammar mistakes
The following diagram displays information about the average prices for accommodation in five major cities around the world. The prices during the period between 1990 and 2002 are compared with the prices in 1989.
It is clear that in New York, Tokyo and London average prices were lower by 5% for New York and by 8% for Tokyo and London until 1995. However during the period from 1996 until 2002 there was an increase in prices in these cities. The most significant increase took place in London, where the prices were higher by 12% compared with 1989.
As we can see, there was also an increase in New York, where in 1996-2002 period the prices were higher by 5% in comparison with 1989. In Tokyo prices for accommodation were still lower during 1996-2002 period than in 1989, but slightly higher than in 1990-1995 period.
In Frankfurt and Madrid the prices for accommodation were slightly higher between 1990 and 2002 than in 1989.The percentage change in average house prices was insignificant in both cities during the whole period.

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Guys please check this short IELTS writing exercise for grammar mistakes
The following diagram displays information about the average prices for accommodation in five major cities around the world. The prices during the period between 1990 and 2002 are compared with the prices in 1989.
It is clear that in New York, Tokyo and London average prices were lower by 5% for New York and by 8% for Tokyo and London until 1995. However during the period from 1996 until 2002 there was an increase in prices in these cities. The most significant increase took place in London, where the prices were higher by 12% compared with 1989.
As we can see, there was also an increase in New York, where in 1996-2002 period the prices were higher by 5% in comparison with 1989. In Tokyo prices for accommodation were still lower during 1996-2002 period than in 1989, but slightly higher than in 1990-1995 period.
In Frankfurt and Madrid the prices for accommodation were slightly higher between 1990 and 2002 than in 1989.The percentage change in average house prices was insignificant in both cities during the whole period.

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London the average prices and have a look at when to use whereas intead of where. Also try more formal methods, like relative clauses and formal vocabulary.

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Hey,

"... wherein the 1996-2002 period...."
"during the 1996-2002..."

After in Frankfurt and Madrid, there should be a ","
Also to add to what Lewis said, you used prices often use synonyms. "Costs,rates" etc.

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