Guys please check this short IELTS writing exercise for grammar mistakes. N8
Recently, there have been a lot of debates among the governments of different states about the various problems of languages. One of the most discussed topics is that some languages go out of use and disappear. The problem is very controversial and lots of opposite opinions were expressed on the topic.
Some people think that a language is only a tool for communication. In a very practical sense, we all use language as an ability to express ourselves, and as a consequence learn other languages for more opportunities. Some languages are considered to be more important than another, because more people use them worldwide. As a result there is an opinion that life would be easier if there are fewer or even just one language. This point of view may be understood, although would be more convenient for those who already are native speakers of the more popular language. For the minor language speakers it may be difficult, not only to learn a new language, but also to acceptthe cultural differences.
These sort of differences are an evidence that a language, apart from being a communication tool, is also a significant cultural heritage. In various ways, it affects the individual’s behavior and mindset. Thereby, a language is also a very important part of the cultural heritage, national pride and uniqueness. Consequently, it may be considered as a great loss for the population when its language dies out.
In conclusion, I would like to remember an old Chinese expression, which says: “You are as many times a human, as many languages you know”. In my opinion, any existing language must be preserved and taken care of. As a modern society, we have all the necessary skills and information to make our life easier not by eliminating languages, but rather by learning new ones. I am totally sure, that by learning less popular languages we can secure them from dying out and also make them reasonably popular.

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Guys please check this short IELTS writing exercise for grammar mistakes. N8
Recently, there have been a lot of debates among the governments of different states about the various problems of languages. One of the most discussed topics is that some languages go out of use and disappear. The problem is very controversial and lots of opposite opinions were expressed on the topic.
Some people think that a language is only a tool for communication. In a very practical sense, we all use language as an ability to express ourselves, and as a consequence learn other languages for more opportunities. Some languages are considered to be more important than another, because more people use them worldwide. As a result there is an opinion that life would be easier if there are fewer or even just one language. This point of view may be understood, although would be more convenient for those who already are native speakers of the more popular language. For the minor language speakers it may be difficult, not only to learn a new language, but also to acceptthe cultural differences.
These sort of differences are an evidence that a language, apart from being a communication tool, is also a significant cultural heritage. In various ways, it affects the individual’s behavior and mindset. Thereby, a language is also a very important part of the cultural heritage, national pride and uniqueness. Consequently, it may be considered as a great loss for the population when its language dies out.
In conclusion, I would like to remember an old Chinese expression, which says: “You are as many times a human, as many languages you know”. In my opinion, any existing language must be preserved and taken care of. As a modern society, we have all the necessary skills and information to make our life easier not by eliminating languages, but rather by learning new ones. I am totally sure, that by learning less popular languages we can secure them from dying out and also make them reasonably popular.

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Recently, there have been a lot of debates among the governments of different states about the various problems of languages. One of the most discussed topics is that some languages go out of use and disappear. The problem is very controversial and lots of OPPOSING opinions HAVE BEEN expressed on the topic.
Some people think that a language is only a tool for communication. In a very practical sense, we all use language  to express ourselves, and  we often learn other languages TO GIVE OURSELVES  more opportunities. Some languages are considered to be more important than OTHERS because more people use them worldwide. As a result, there is an opinion that life would be easier if there WERE fewer, or POSSIBLY even just one language. This point of view may be understood, although IT would be more convenient for those who already are native speakers of the more popular language. For the speakers OF THE MINOR LANGUAGES it might be difficult,  not only to learn a new language, but also to accept IT.

Veaceslav - I hope this helps. Some of the changes I made were simply word choices that sound a little more natural but several things that you will want to look at more closely are :

1. Verb agreement.  Although there are possibly a few exceptions, as a general rule when you have multiple clauses in a sentence the verbs in both clauses need to be in the same tense or a progressive or perfect tense that is in agreement with the first verb. For example:  As a result there is an opinion that life WOULD be easier if there WERE (not "are") fewer or even just one language.
 2. Also make sure that you are using the correct plural or singular form of nouns and pronouns.  We  compare one thing to "another", but in your sentence comparing "some languages" we will compare them with others ( not another).

I hope this helps you. If you have other questions please send me a message.
Take care and good luck.

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