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helllo guys! I really need your help! I was given a task to create a fairy-tale or a story with underlined words. So did I. Could you please check it and point out my mistakes?I did all my best trying to convey the meaning well. Once upon a time there was a hedgehog by the name of Cactus that worked at the company "The spines run the world" . Their mission(task) was in summer to collect berries, fruits, mushrooms for winter.The working conditions were extremely awful since they worked under a boiling sun. Nobody minded, complained.But Cactus couldn't stand the heat and he couldn't help it. So,he decided to run away.He was wandering for a long time until he saw a hunting-box. In order to satisfy his thirst he got into a house.Cactus found the whole bowl of milk and drank it.Suddenly he heard the noise and jumped into an open round door.(to be continued)Someone's hand throw a laundry to him and shut the door with a bang. He was begun to spin. It was the laundry that he couldn't express in words.When it finished, he realized that he lost all his spines. In a flash, he became miserable.Now it didn't make any sense to come back to the company, go out with his lovely Cactusina(his girlfriend), think about a happy marriage.Sitting under pines he was grieving. The weather immeditely deteriorated. The big wind picked up. The pines needles stuck into the hedgehog and he felt himself like the spiny Cactus again. Luckily, everything turned out well and he was back at work. Above all things, his mates were impressed by his green trendy look(green pines needles).It makes sense to remind that he was grateful to his fate for this awesome experience, at least he stopped to bother everyone with his complaints.key words are (to run away from, to make sense, laundry, to bother, to stand, to remind, to mind,hunter, in order to, to impress, to complain, at least, conditions, awful, awesome,miserable, I can't help it, luckily, the whole, to be grateful, to express.) According to the task I should use all these words and can't change these words.

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It's not bad, only a few details: Once upon a time there was a hedgehog by the name of Cactus that worked at the company "The spines run the world" . Their mission(task) was, in the summer, to collect berries, fruits and mushrooms for winter. The working conditions were extremely awful since they worked under a boiling sun. Nobody minded or complained. However (it's not wrong but it's never nice to start a sentence with but) Cactus couldn't stand the heat and he couldn't help it. So he decided to run away. He was wandering for a long time until he saw a hunting-box. In order to satisfy his thirst he got into a house. Cactus found a whole bowl of milk and drank it. Suddenly he heard a noise and jumped into an open round door.

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